Small children sat against the wall, slurping from hot tubes. A Star Woman cloaked in the long white robes of her order filled tubes from a keg and handed them to more children.
“Look, Sister Skyleen. A man is lost in the U,” a small child said loud and clear over the chatter, catching the attention of the other children who hushed.
Sister Skyleen whirled around with a swish of fabric from her loose robes.
They stared at each other in open-mouthed shock. Kyler was stunned at the shiny, black curls that peeped under her hood, at the large, warm brown eyes framed in curly black lashes.
Weren’t Star Women older? Hard and worn from devoting their lives to the Unfortunate? This woman was…delicious. Skin the color of a spice cake, deep rose red lips.
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"Skin the color of spice cake." Awesome descriptions. Love the snippet. Great stuff!
ReplyDeleteThey have to be young before they get old! At least, that's what my science classes taught me.
ReplyDeleteReading her description, particularly the skin color, made me hungry!
I couldn't help but think of the story "The Gingerbread Man" with his glossy chocolate button eyes.
ReplyDeleteThis snippet will stick with me for a while. Excellent job!
Great descriptions...especially calling her delicious and then following up with the spice cake comment. Maybe "cherry red" lips would go well with that...
ReplyDeletei don't know whether I'm hungey or...Great descriptions.
ReplyDeleteWell, she certainly sounds yummy. I love the set up of this scene, too. Great details. I have no idea what the hot tubes are, but I want some. Stat.
ReplyDeleteSorry for the typos--swear I have been brain dead the past few days.
ReplyDeleteI wanted to write an interracial romance but it really isn't because there are no African Americans in the far far future! But there are darker skinned people.
You can substitute interspecial (sp?) or interplanetary (or as you mentioned, different skin colors) for interracial, and it would achieve the same effect...in my opinion.
ReplyDeleteI used that in my story "Conventional Wisdom" if memory serves.
I agree with Cary--that description nailed it. Well done.
ReplyDeletePossibly shining rather than shiny? She sounds pretty yummy, too.
ReplyDeleteHi Melisse I love your website, great colurs and designs. A real feast for the eyes. I am going to enjoy reading your free e book. Loved the extracts they were great.
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